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August 24th, 2001, 02:12 PM
#1
HB Forum Owner
What's the Big Deal?
we say this when passing in life
the walk of resurging energy & bouncing atoms
when tripping & falling our bodies have known
& desperation the crow cries
for our freedom
for decisions away from Mind
but
we do not notice
what is real
the Big Deal
excited in the sky
birds dancing for colors & clouds
melted wax of pain upon our fingers
the Big Joke
elegant love in a bottle - perfume - food - fear
shining eyes & dull wits to sharpen swords
this Big Pool
of frogs & green envy - lunch on sex in the afternoon
our bodies sweating into each other as the sun drops
eyes of nocturnal mammals
prowling for the
next
catch
life - death - life
the Big Memory
of future
we are playing
in our dreams
This is our resurrection
This is our FOND Admiration
our candy stolen store goods
and we eat them as fruit fallen from tree
loving the bites & Excitement we smile
reading life & the hole
Void
Joy & the coming
Again
I tell you now
This is It
The Answer to
No questions
No Truths
No you me sun stars heavens
This is It
Yes
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August 24th, 2001, 04:54 PM
#2
Inactive Member
u brought reality out perfectly. i caught myself almost nodding to it. i thought that your answer, your point, was expressed very clearly in the end. it flowed nicely. good work!
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August 24th, 2001, 05:07 PM
#3
Senior Hostboard Member
I enjoyed this one, but was confused a bit by it as well. As with most of your work, I seem to find myself picking up pace, almost like I have to read faster, and faster, blitzkrieging until the end. Then when I sit back, I'm like "wow, what was that" and I read it over. I like it, the ending really summed it up and brought it to a wonderous close, but some of the in between was a little claustrophobic to put it into an idea. *nods* but the overall affect I did enjoy *nods again with a smile*
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