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    What's the Big Deal?
    we say this when passing in life
    the walk of resurging energy & bouncing atoms
    when tripping & falling our bodies have known
    & desperation the crow cries
    for our freedom
    for decisions away from Mind
    but
    we do not notice
    what is real
    the Big Deal
    excited in the sky
    birds dancing for colors & clouds
    melted wax of pain upon our fingers
    the Big Joke
    elegant love in a bottle - perfume - food - fear
    shining eyes & dull wits to sharpen swords
    this Big Pool
    of frogs & green envy - lunch on sex in the afternoon
    our bodies sweating into each other as the sun drops
    eyes of nocturnal mammals
    prowling for the
    next
    catch
    life - death - life
    the Big Memory
    of future
    we are playing
    in our dreams
    This is our resurrection
    This is our FOND Admiration
    our candy stolen store goods
    and we eat them as fruit fallen from tree
    loving the bites & Excitement we smile
    reading life & the hole
    Void
    Joy & the coming
    Again
    I tell you now
    This is It
    The Answer to
    No questions
    No Truths
    No you me sun stars heavens
    This is It
    Yes


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    u brought reality out perfectly. i caught myself almost nodding to it. i thought that your answer, your point, was expressed very clearly in the end. it flowed nicely. good work!

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    I enjoyed this one, but was confused a bit by it as well. As with most of your work, I seem to find myself picking up pace, almost like I have to read faster, and faster, blitzkrieging until the end. Then when I sit back, I'm like "wow, what was that" and I read it over. I like it, the ending really summed it up and brought it to a wonderous close, but some of the in between was a little claustrophobic to put it into an idea. *nods* but the overall affect I did enjoy *nods again with a smile*

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